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#1 Ramo

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:03 AM

The first look into your Eyes,
I forgot about my life and all it's Lies,
Everything around us froze as time Flies,
And that was just the first look into your Eyes,


The second look into your eyes I saw my whole future flash in It,
My heart started beating two thousand times a Minute,
My heart is mine but I want you to Win It,
I loved the day cupid came along to Pin It,
And that's when my love for you will have no Limit,


The third look was definitely the Best,
It resolved all my problems and put them to Rest,
It was wonderful feeling your heart near my Chest,
Because it made me feel higher than the tallest mountain Crest,
And because of that I want you to put my intuition to the Test,



And this is just what your eyes did to me,
What the rest of you can do is unimaginable you see,
You are perfect and I want 'US' to be,
Habibaty,



Not Islamic, I know. Terrr, What can i say? Hope you enjoyed reading it ;)
salam.

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:08 AM

vah, vah.

All this happened in the first three glances . intense innit.
I'm just going to assume the first three glances were simply increments of the first glance.

Edited by Transition?, 08 April 2010 - 04:09 AM.


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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:11 AM

View PostTransition?, on Apr 8 2010, 01:08 PM, said:

vah, vah.

All this happened in the first three glances . intense innit.
I'm just going to assume the first three glances were simply increments of the first glance.


Is that a compliment?. I don't speak britenglish, translation please =]

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:14 AM

View PostRamo, on Apr 8 2010, 12:11 AM, said:

View PostTransition?, on Apr 8 2010, 01:08 PM, said:

vah, vah.

All this happened in the first three glances . intense innit.
I'm just going to assume the first three glances were simply increments of the first glance.


Is that a compliment?. I don't speak britenglish, translation please =]


Yes it's a compliment.

I made it kinda islamic but interpreting the first three looks as an extension of the first glance that is permissible in Islam. geddit!?!

I'm not British, I just can't stop saying innit. init.

#5 Ramo

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:18 AM

View PostTransition?, on Apr 8 2010, 01:14 PM, said:

View PostRamo, on Apr 8 2010, 12:11 AM, said:

View PostTransition?, on Apr 8 2010, 01:08 PM, said:

vah, vah.

All this happened in the first three glances . intense innit.
I'm just going to assume the first three glances were simply increments of the first glance.


Is that a compliment?. I don't speak britenglish, translation please =]


Yes it's a compliment.

I made it kinda islamic but interpreting the first three looks as an extension of the first glance that is permissible in Islam. geddit!?!

I'm not British, I just can't stop saying innit. init.



Ah, Thanks for the compliment.

No I don't geddit and No I'm not going innit. innit!.

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 04:35 AM

This reminded me of another poem, Check out this brother, he managed to make it both a love poem and Islamic at the same time , watch till the end to fully understand what he's getting at.





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Posted 08 April 2010 - 05:11 AM

That video was amazing. I learnt that kind of poetry in year 7-8, Its where the poet makes the audience think he is tlaking about one thing, When at the end he was totally talkin about another. I had an assignment to write 2 of these, lets just say they worked perfect, The teacher stopped me halfway screamin her head off at me because she thought (well i made her think) i was talking about something sexual, and wallahi (which she later found out with out interrupting) I was talkin about my shoes =]. Got top marks for it. what was this style of poetry called but, persona? similarity? meh i forgot.

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Posted 08 April 2010 - 09:48 AM

bro ramo, where you been so long?

mashaAllah that's a beautiful poem! specially the last few lines =)

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Posted 09 April 2010 - 04:38 PM

View Post~Sanah~, on Apr 8 2010, 06:48 PM, said:

bro ramo, where you been so long?

mashaAllah that's a beautiful poem! specially the last few lines =)


salam,
Ive been around, the world got a little too hektik and so i got caught up with my personal life.

& why thank you sister. inshallah ill have more comin up, Islamic ones with the help of inspiration and motivation this community (forum) has given me.
salam

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Posted 09 April 2010 - 04:45 PM

wa'alaikumassalaam warahmatullahi wabaraktuh bro. hope everything is alright on your side by the mercy of Allah. do stick around now inshaAllah! will wait to check out your poems.

wassalaam

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Posted 10 April 2010 - 07:52 AM

mashallah that was nice!

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Posted 10 April 2010 - 08:35 AM

View PostJineen, on Apr 10 2010, 04:52 PM, said:

mashallah that was nice!



thanks

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Posted 05 March 2012 - 06:52 PM

we still allowed to bump?? :P

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Posted 07 March 2012 - 04:33 PM

^ yes you can bump as much as you like :) inshaAllah if its beneficial ....


and good poem brother Ramo ... haha ! Ramo looks like some fighting player name ...

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Posted 10 April 2012 - 06:48 AM

jazaks sis. Lol you sure you not thinking of Rambo? :P



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